Rashid's Essay Revisited (TB treatment)
Let me know what you think, you silent majority!
How do you think society will be affected by the growth of telecommuting?
Many telecommuters claim that 'working from home' has made life easier for them and the community.Whereas, their critics argue that telecommuting has blurred the boundaries (S) between work and family life, job and social life.In this essay,I shall analyse the (G) arguments of two sides, and conclude why I do not recommend (S) this form of work. [Fine opening, clear position, don't you silent lot think?]
Information technology,undoubtedly,has revolutionised working practices.Take,for example, the people doing their office work at home in countries such as Pakistan and communicating (S) with their central offices through the Internet.Workers are of the view that their peroformance has improved as a result of a flexible working schedule and non-interference (of) from their managers. Another argument often given in favour of 'home-working' is that by reducing the number of commuters,it will lessen the traffic burden during rush hours,and as a result, the movement of other citizens during peak hours will become easier and faster. However (But), I do not think this matter is as simple as has been presented by supporters of this mode of working. Let us, now, look at the other facet of the issue. [Fair enough, the "for" argument, explained in detail, even though we know Rashid does not believe in this line of argument].
Proponents of 'the family first' contend that the practice of performing official tasks at home has encroached (S) upon our family lives.In consequence,family members end up arguing with each other about the balance between time spent working and that spent with the family.Instead of becoming a source of happiness, (the) (G) work (is becoming) becomes (G) a bone of contention. What is more, a lot of people are seeking psychological counselling to tackle the spill over of work to their homes. I,as a doctor,have come across many such disturbed families. Moreover,'home-workers' do not have the facility of taking assistance and guidance from senior office colleagues if they face any difficulty in their work. Besides this ,there is no face-to-face communication between workers and (customers) (WC) clients. Consequently, this leads to their social isolation (away) from their shared offices and social venues. Another problem is that distant employees are not available to administrators for office meetings. Hence, (the) (G) work can not be directly monitored by (owners) (WC) employers / managers (?). [Yes, I feel Rashid has made his case, do you agree?]
In conclusion,I am fully convinced that while telecommuting has provided some flexibilty (S) to modes of working,it has adversely affected the family life and social relationships. I,therefore, do not support this method of working. If it has to be allowed at all (WO), it should be (governed) (WC) enacted in such a way that it does not interfere with the home environment, nor it does it affect interaction between workers, their colleagues, (customers) clients and employers.
Well campers, I think Dr Rashid has done another solid job, don't you think so?
Ieltstroop have proven to be a complete waste of space as regards using the BC weblog to help themselves gain insights into their IELTS weaknesses.
I apologise for the apathy of this class, Rashid, I wonder what I have done wrong. Or maybe that's just how it goes...
Any thoughts anyone?
Rashid, would you care to do a model Task 1 writing? It would be great if you could attempt to describe a PROCESS from a diagram - how about the "Water Cycle" on Insight to IELTS page 77? That would be great!
Many thanks for your support of the weblog, Rashid - all the very best for 11/13 August!!!
Best regards
Tony